Jeffrey Gelkins (BIO)

[Coolguy21]

Name: Jeffrey Gelkins
Age: 29
Race: Undead
Gender: Male
Class: Former Artist

Languages: Forsaken

Faction: Horde

Personality: He can be very polite in conversation, and very silent when out of conversation. He can have slight crazy outbursts, but nothing too serious, like thinking a glass of water is wine, or vice versa.

Likes/Dislikes: He likes his style of life. Not knowing where he is and what he's doing there, and he really dislikes Orcs.

Appearance: He wears a brown vest and pants, with black gloves. He has a battered hat, and carries a small dagger. It doesn't seem like much, but it actually is a viable protection weapon.

Strengths/Weaknesses: No strengths. Just weaknesses. His insanity can sometimes put him in dangerous situations, and even when you think things can't get any worse, Jeffrey comes in and it just immediatly GETS worse.

History: Jeffrey was a talented artist in life, who traveled across the land selling his art. His art consisted of the battles, such as the Assault on Icecrown, and the Second War. Jeffrey had a companion, a gnome, named Crazley, who helped set up the stand and cook. Jeffrey and Crazley were friends since childhood, and when Jeffrey told him about his plan to be a Traveling Artist, Crazley didn't hesitate to help. Jeffrey and Crazley basically traveled all through the Eastern Kingdoms, searching for people to sell Jeffrey's art to. They had a Caravan, where they also lived in, but they didn't mind it one bit. They kept a steady supply of food and water, and restocked at the nearest town. One day, while they were heading through Arathi, some Undead Gaurds stopped them in their tracks. Jeffrey tried to explain they were just Merchants, but the Undead didn't understand them, and attacked. Crazley tried to flee, and the Gaurds let him go. They talked for quite a bit of what to do of the body, and they decided to give it to the Gaurd Captain. The Gaurd Captain told them to take the Corpse to Hanzel, Brill's local Necromancer. Hanzel was in search of Corpses to revive, so it would be a win-win. They gave it to Hanzel, and he thanked the gaurds. He waited a while for the corpse to rot, for he couldn't revive a fresh one. After 5 months of waiting, he decided it was long enough and started the process of Reanimation. When Jeffrey was revived, he expirienced quite a bit of Brain Rot, so he forgot a lot of who he was, and expirienced some symptoms of insanity. When Hanzel tried to explain what happened, Jeffrey went crazy and blasted out the door, screaming. When Hanzel found him, he was knocked out in the Cemetary. Hanzel sighed, and brought him to a empty house nearby. 5 hours later, when Jeffrey awoken, he was in a house and he tried to figure out what happened. He left the house, and walked for a good 30 minutes. He made it to Brill, where he found Hanzel. Hanzel congratulated him for making it this far sarcastically, and Jeffrey asked where he was. Hanzel told him he was in Brill, and he was Undead. He also explained that he ran off and knocked himself out. Jeffrey asked what his purpouse was, and Hanzel told him it was sort of like another chance. Jeffrey didn't know what he ment by this, but Hanzel didn't wait for a response. He took him to Undercity, where they gave him a home and a few gold to get him started. Jeffrey thanked them, and started his new life.

Notes: Jeffrey has no knowledge of any important events, such as Wrathgate or the Fall of the Lich King, or Illidan. (Not that he did before, but even when he was alive he knew a good amount about those events.)

[The Madgod]

So... what's this character's point? Is it just for you to have a bio for a very casual RP? Because you can't really bring a cook into anything that has combat, even if he was one of the best assassins in Stormwind, which is rather a bit overpowered to me, even if it doesn't show in the present time version of the character.

I also think that a lot of this could be fleshed out further. How did he become an assassin? How did he become good? He fought and attempted to kill his brother. How did he feel about that? Did he have any squeamishness with the idea or was he perfectly willing to do it? Why did you decide for him to be burried near Ironforge? What's the significance of that? Is there any? Why were those people hunting for corpses in the Ironforge cemetary? Why not call the "Corpse Reanimator" a necromancer ()? Why were these people trying to make undead? It couldn't have been easy for them to find a necromancer, how did they do it? Why did Jeffery want to be a cook? If he didn't remember who he was, why did he associate with the Horde, when he was reanimated in Alliance territory and he probably wouldn't know who or what either side was? How good of a cook is he? Did he have any experience when he was alive? Did that experience carry over when he died or did he forget it like everything else, apparently? I like the basic idea of this character and I feel if you can answer these questions, this bio can be pretty good, but right now I feel that there's just a lack of detail and a lack of information and motive.

[Nonfictionless]

Alrighty. Well Coolguy21, this time I think I'm just going to give you a link to start off with. An old RPer, Crusader Vermiliel Mauritius Dawnguardian, wrote a very helpful question sheet for creating a new character. Roleplaying Q&A - A resource for building character background and personality. I personally use it with every character I make. Now you don't have to answer every one of them, I know there are a lot, but just a few from each section and you will find making your character so much easier and so much better. So I think you should give it a try and write more into this Bio and into Captain Maggottusk.

[stomination]

I remember a segal movie where he was a cook and saved the day.

[Nonfictionless]

I remember a segal movie where he was a cook and saved the day.

Yes, were he was a former navy seal and didn't forget all his training and accomplishments.