So, I 'm not sure if I'm allowed to make this type of thread but I figure its worth a shot. I have a cousin who's in grade 10 and he's taking a creative writing class. He was given an assignment to write a short story. He wrote a few pages and hasn't been able to come up with a title for it yet. Now he's looking for some feedback. I personally think its pretty decent for a grade 10 class but I'm not an expert so I figure some people here could probably give some better advice than me. Any feedback at all would be appreciated. So if you have patience to read through it, we'd love to hear what you think. Thanks!
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