Criticism on Video for a Computer class

[Tractusilent]

Hello guys, I was wondering if anyone could help me with a project I am doing for a computer class.
Basically The project is a playthrough with commentary of DC Universe. Right now I’m just looking for some criticism that could help( not hurt) me.
If you could give me any good pointers it would be greatly appreciated.
Sorry about the lack of posts here so I cant link the video/channel

youtube.com/user/Tractusilent?feature=mhum

Edit: Thank you SheepHunter

[SheepHunter]

www.youtube.com/user/Tractusilent?feature=mhum

There you go