sandman, I believe this post was aimed at you as well, but I forgot to include your name/a quote. Looking first at the Ultraxion Normal kill. You had 135 ES ticks and the other hunter had 153 with 5 extra LnL procs. While factoring in the LnL procs you're still behind on ES casts, so make sure you aren't delaying your ES with other shots and are never focus starved. Also, he has 6 more BA ticks than you which means increased LnL procs (shouldn't be 5 more, looks like you got pretty terrible RNG). As mentioned you didn't have pet talents the Culling of the Herd + Call of the Wild would definitely help as well as all of the other passive pet damage buffs.
It doesn't look like you got lust either on Ultrax so you may have been phased out when it was cast?
Either way, on that fight you want to line up your Chronohunter proc with Lust (assuming you lust at the start) and then once the 4p drops use RF. Make sure to use Engi/CotW/pot right away with the Chronohunter/Lust and it will carry over to the RF/Lust. You could have also delayed your 3rd engi glove use to line up your second chronohunter proc without losing out on an engi glove proc so make sure you're watching the ICD on Chronohunter, if you're not NeedtoKnow is a good addon for doing so. The log only shows you getting 21.2 seconds from the Tol'vir pot so 1) it looks like it was popped early/partially in the zone out phase and 2) you didn't use a second which you should use with the 2nd Chronohunter proc or with execute range.
I usually just look at Ultraxion parses as there are too many factors in other fights such as number of black oozes, number of times blocked, etc; but you can extrapolate this information to other fights and decide when to use CDs and what to stack. You should easily break 40k with the pet talents/reforging/and the above recommendations.
Not 100% sure who this review was about as I didn't add the name at the time.