[Other] Dragon ball - Fanfiction - Post GT - Comments please

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So i have been traveling alot lately, and therefor i have begun writte a sidestory of dragon ball post gt.

Before you begin reading, i apologise for any typos.

Chapter 1. Sleeping in the dark.

Sleeping in the dark, time no longer seemed to pass. He had been in that watery chamber for as long as could remember. At first there was a violent pain as the majority of his body had been destroyed and disintegrated by the sun, but through the course of time the pain had slowly been vanishing, furthermore parts of his body which he was sure were destroyed, were slowly regaining their feeling.
He did not know where he was, every time he tried to open his eyes, asides from the pain he saw nothing but pure darkness.
Being robbed of his sight and hearing had acquired him a sixth sense. He could faintly feel powerful live forms in the great distance. Of the auras he felt, there was one that felt familiar to him which kept waking him up every time his sixth sense would feel it, and every few years he would feel it again and for some unknown reason it disturbed him. Every time that familiar aura appeared it clashed with others unknown powerful auras, and every time the recognizable aura would be the one remaining. What further distressed him was that the first time he felt that aura, it felt strong, but as years passed it had grown to the point where it’s very pressure scared him.
His sixth sense grew stronger to the point where he began to feel a single faint weak aura close to him, try as he might, he could never feel anything besides that single aura. And it was always close to him, watching him and never leaving for long. This weak aura did not feel hostile; instead it felt warm and caring, though every time he felt the familiar strong aura, aside from feeling distressed he also felt changes in the weak aura, it acted as though it was scared.

- What this man did not know, or remember was that the familiar aura he felt was that of Goku. The first time he felt this aura clash was when goku went up against Kid buu in his super saiyan third form.
Other times he felt this aura was when goku went up against baby in his fourth super saiyan form, and again against the shadow dragons. The last time he felt the aura was when goku and vegeta went up against Omega Shenron.

An unbelievably long time had now passed since he for the last time felt the familiar aura, but in all this time the weak aura outside of his chamber had not disappeared. But there were some changes happening which he did not understand. At the beginning there were no sounds, there was nothing but complete darkness and emptiness. But now he could faintly hear sounds, he could hear small bubbles rising towards an unknown surface, which made him fall asleep. Every time he would open his eyes, it would feel as though months and years had passed.

The reality of the matter was the intuition was correct.

Every time he opened his eyes he was healthier than before. He now felt a weird sensation on his back; it felt as though a familiar third arm which he lost a long time ago had returned which he slowly wrapped around his waist, the very effort tired him… He closed his eyes again…
He opened his eyes again to see darkness once more, but the familiar darkness seemed slightly different, it felt as though the complete darkness he remembered was lighter than before. He also felt another feeling, there seemed to be small miniscule needles injected in him on the majority of his body, but he did not care, for there was one sensation be felt which was greater than any other he had ever felt. He could wiggle 2 of his fingers on his right hand, and a single finger on his left hand… and he closed his eyes once again…

He opened his eyes…

He found himself in a grand chamber, he tried to look but some parts of his body were paralyzed including his neck and legs with the exception of some toes. So the best he could manage was to look from side to side using his eyes, but everything was too blurry to make out. What he noticed was that he now could move all of his fingers, though his arms were still a different story.
He also heard a faint voice, asking ‘’Are you Awake?’’ But he was too tired; all the effort he had used to trying to move had used all of his energy…
And so his eyes closed for the last time, for when he woke up he would finally be completely healed.

Leave your comments, good story? bad story? want to read more?
I am pretty much only doing this for MY own entertaining, but i dont mind sharing .

[Blueobelisk]

Sorry, the writing style is completely boring, not to mention DBZ is about watching action, not reading.