So, about a year ago I made this thread.
I got some positive and some negative replies but I made several mistakes. I asked people to rate them, man, was I silly. I didn't explain what each of these poems stood for thus people questioned their meaning and even said I put words there just because. Here I am, a year from then, with some new poems written down in my notepad file :P
I've made sure that all the verses in the poems rhyme ( except one ). I don't use words just because. I don't use words that just rhyme. I spend hours trying to find that one word that both rhymes and has meaning appropriate for the theme of the poem.
Description: I've had countless pointless arguments with a friend of mine ( though we are way past it nowadays ). I was mad at him at the time, but I actually wrote this later when it was over and when I was completely calm. I don't want people to think of me as an "emo" or anything like that.Your ignorance I cannot stand.
Why won't you ever understand?
How many times need I repeat?
Your promise lasts a heartbeat.
And much to your dismay,
It's you who is astray.
And much to your dismay,
Your rules I won't obey.
It's so easy to deny,
But this time I won't comply.
And without a second thought,
I leave you for the peace I've always sought!
Description: It's pretty self-explanatory. Once again, I wasn't actually desperate when I wrote this.Billion stars, heed my call!
Listen to me, if you hear at all!
Show me the path, this is my prayer!
Lonely wandering, I'm lost in despair!
I'm calling for help, but you don't care!
Just watching me from above - this is unfair!
Description: Some months ago I made yet another attempt to write a story ( going to get down to it in a week when my Summer break starts ) and this poem was going to have a role in it. For those who don't know: sprite is an evil spirit. Not the best word for my poem ( since in my poem, it's supposed to be some great, great evil, whereas sprite is more like a... ghoul. Those little troublesome spirits, ya know. But oh well... ). It causes "streams of pouring tears" when it, for example, goes through some village and brings a disaster. Tears pour from the eyes of the villagers, etc. Just for clarity: The heart that is full of thousand hollows could be anyones, just like that person who is screaming out of fright could be anyone. The tears that drop, anyone could be the one crying. Anyone's soul could've been shattered and then scattered. ( I feel obligated to explain this because some people really don't understand ) It's not anyone specific. In the last paragraph, "Sun appears" "quickly disappears", I really couldn't find anything else. The whole poem is actually a riddle in the story I am writing. Each element in it like "Sun, heart, light, thousand hollows, fragile soul, thousand pieces, subtle spark, shroud of sorrow", all of these are clues. The two characters wander in a forest and have to find something. The heart is actually the heart of the forest, the thousand hollows are actually thousand caves. The fragile soul is the thing they are looking for and the thousand pieces are scattered in the caves, etc. And in the last verse: "reignites the hope, warm and bright!", for those who might question its meaning - it means that the hope reignites itself. Like a flame that was dying out and suddenly bursts into huge flames on its own. And once it has reignites, it is very warm and bright. Because those two words actually describe hope very well. Hope is something that warms your heart and guides you in the darkness, at least that's how I see it.Somewhere, hidden from the light,
wanders such malevolent a sprite.
Evil that exceeds our greatest fears,
causing streams of pouring tears.
Somewhere, hidden from the light,
someone's screaming out of fright.
Scared, lost and drowning in despair,
someone rinses out his final prayer.
A tear drops, a second follows,
The heart is full of thousand hollows.
One fragile soul is relentlessly shattered,
It's thousand pieces - mercilessly scattered.
The impenetrable darkness hungers,
as the weeping sky violently thunders.
A subtle spark of distant light,
fades into the all-consuming night.
But at last, the dazzling Sun appears,
the shroud of sorrow quickly disappears.
And somewhere, hidden from the light,
reignites the hope, warm and bright!
Description: This is the one exception where I didn't really focus on rhymes that much. There are only 2 verses that rhyme "volunteer/clear" and "return/spurn". The poem is about a friend of mine, not a specific one, just someone who I consider a friend. Though, what inspired me to write it is the fact I have a lot of friends who love promising to help ( some have promised to buy me things, though, I never really believed them in the first place ) and then slipping away with some lame excuse or "forgetting" that they have made a promise. In most cases I just let it go. Sometimes I remind them but the next time they forget about it, I just cba. It's too uncomfortable asking friends for things. In the fifth verse I've put 2 words in brackets because personally I prefer it without them but I'm not sure if other people would get the overall meaning.Why do people promise?
Why do people lie?
Noone had asked for anything,
Noone said you have to help.
You came before me as a volunteer,
You came before me loud and clear.
You could've slipped away,
You could've spared me.
Noone would've noticed,
Noone would've blamed you.
In spite of that you promised (to) help,
In spite of that you offered (your) aid.
And here I am awaiting your return,
And here I am letdown and full of spurn.
Description: This one is more like a joke. I was doing Siege of Orgrimmar LFR ( last wing ) and we were preparing to clear trash before Siegecrafter Blackfuse. I was talking with some guy in the raid chat and another one said "OMFG STOP SPAMMING THE CHAT". Personally, I hate it when people say stuff like that. The chat is exactly for chatting and chatting alone. "What the fuck do you think the chat is for?" I replied. And then he said "For writing poems to a turtle" ( well, it was longer than that, but the sentence in the quotes is the important part ). You've probably already figured out that my reply is the "poem" above. I came up with it on the spot. It surprised even me xD Needless to say, the whole raid group spent the next few minutes laughing ( "LOL", "ROFLMAO", "OMFGHAHA", etc ).Roses are red, violets are purple,
You are one beautiful turtle!
Description: This one was also supposed to be for the story I am writing. It's supposedly the bad guys' oath.Our hatred, boundless and seething,
It devours all that is breathing.
Our wrath is bestial, impending,
Our agony - a curse unending.
Our vengeance, eagerly awaited,
Our lust for blood cannot be sated.
Our justice, unwavering and strict,
Each enemy is given a divine convict.
Our ranks stand tall and proud,
As we unleash our roars loud.
Victorious, we pave our story,
Marching through the path of glory!
Description: I don't really know what "Rise and fall!" is supposed to mean, honestly. I was just playing League of Legends and during the loading screen I couldn't stop repeating this in my mind. It came out of nowhere... As to the rest of the poems, the fourth line in each paragraph is separate from the second and the third. What I mean is that, roaring like a crackling thunder has nothing to do with being sturdy like a castle wall :P It's weird, I know. But as I said, this whole poem came out of nowhere in my mind.Rise and fall!
Like the mountains tall,
Never defer, never doubt,
Dash forward and vigorously shout!
Rise and fall!
Strike with power raw,
Never falter, never stumble,
Always proud and never humble!
Rise and fall!
Sturdy like a castle wall,
Never crumble, never sunder,
Roar like a crackling thunder!
Description: This poem was a lot different originally. A friend had asked me to write something for a female friend of his ( because she likes poems ). But as I didn't like it that much, a few months later I decided to rewrite it. As you can see, some of the lines can also be seen in my other poems. I like certain phrases and I often make variations of them in my new poems that follow the same theme.The moonlight exposes your tears,
revealing your greatest fears.
The darkness devours your soul,
leaving behind an empty hole.
The rain gently washes away the pain,
but in the end, it's all in vain.
A tear drops, a second follows,
the heart is full of thousand hollows.
The haunting nightmares will soon disperse,
but it will be too late to remove this curse.
So wake up quickly, grab my hand,
your weeping heart I want to mend.
Your smile like a newborn star is bright,
believe and it will bring the light.
It will pierce through the shroud of sorrow,
and together we will walk towards tomorrow!
Description: This is my most recent poem. It's one of the few poems that actually expresses the way I felt at the time of writing it. It had just begun to rain outside and I could already hear the thunders. I really wanted to go out in the rain but I had to write this down before I had forgotten it. To those who would question the meaning of "I won't live a life so humble!" - it means that I won't be like every other human, I won't reconcile with the disasters and with the misery and all the shit in one's life. I shall rise above the rest. I will be different.I will go out in the rain,
I will handle all the pain,
I will roar with the thunders,
I will stand up as the world sunders!
I won't fall into despair,
I won't say my final prayer,
I won't let my spirit crumble,
I won't live a life so humble!
I shall rise above the rest,
I shall fight to be the best,
I shall shine upon the land at night,
I shall become the guiding light!
I refuse to let hope go away,
I refuse to kneel (down) and pray,
I refuse to tremble out of fright,
I refuse to go down without a fight!
And in the darkest night,
in the most hopeless fight,
with my fists full of might,
I charge towards the future bright!
Update:
Description: This is the story of a man who has lost his wife. He feels guilt and is wandering in a sea of mixed emotions. Eventually, his illusions of his wife help him snap out of his emotional trance. Again I've reused some of the phrases I use, but they are in no way out of place there. This time around I just opened my notepad file and started writing. I didn't search for rhymes, I didn't check translations. I think it turned out better than my previous attempts. And a reminder: This is just fanwork. Criticism is fine, but keep in mind that I am not writing these poems for a book or something. It's just like a hobby. I am not going to publish them or anything. At least not in the near future.I look ahead and wonder,
how long shall I wander?
Always following the road,
never daring to go abroad.
I want to stop and rest,
and decide which path is best.
Long since have I lost the map,
which shows my way outta this trap.
Where next? What follows?
My heart is full of hollows.
Hollows that I cannot fill,
pain which I cannot swill.
Your smell is in the air,
I can almost feel your hair.
You've come before me as a ghost,
because without you by my side I'm lost.
You will be my eyes and feet,
I will be your claws and teeth.
You shall become my guiding light,
and I will fight with all my might.
We will pierce through the shroud of sorrow,
and together we will walk towards tomorrow!
Well, that's it. I hope you enjoyed. I am looking forward to receiving some constructive criticism.